[Lady Rinoa]

Loved it.

I must say that the way you described everything was very well done; the adjectives in conjunction with a sense of a certain emotions behind it went along nicely. When a hint of it shows, makes the reader wonder where the author is going with it as it describes with such detail the surroundings, (which by the way I swear I could just see myself in one of those grummy yet exciting clubs, I would love to visit one of those) and that is of course the point, to make the reader perceive it to such extent, taking us into the world you are describing.

Anyways, I enjoyed the read. You mentioned that this really isn’t your style; well I encourage you to keep using it. I’ll be honest, and this is for myself only of course…I won’t really bother when they’re long ass stories because I cba to read all of it unless it catches my attention, yours in this case however, grasped it well and if you usually write it this way, then you got yourself a reader, so entice me