Errors here and there isn't that much of a problem to me. If i can read it and get the point you're trying to get across, it works. Well, another wonderful little story you're starting. I cant wait for the next part of it. Take your time on writing it but don't take too long T.T
I really take interest in these types of writing. The short sentences keep everything fast and short, if its too long people might lose interest. So i think you're doing awesome so far
