Naruto's fight, characters.

Naruto's Fight · 09-29-2007, 08:32 PM

Name:Arinine brackendork (Elvish) Aripiooine rishindar (Dwarvern)
Age:16
Race:Elf
Height: 5'6
Eyes:Blue(Red when angry)
Occupation:Gets payed by rebels to kill the king ropined's men (Ropined is a human king)
Notable characteristics: Two dragon claw scrapes on his right cheek
Magic:He has the power to Control, Fire,Ice,can Transform into a dragon the size of a Cheetah, and can summon the souls of dead dragons.
Weaknesses:Thunder, Crystal(Weapons not the raw material) and can't take alot of beer before getting drunk, and is very weak physically
Strengths:He can tame dragons and control them, he is a master of Elven and Dwarvern magic, and has a wide knowledge of maps.
Personality: Basically he's angry all the time
Weapons: Dragon Staff, Flame Staff, Elemental ring, and the jade of the ground.
Armor: Golden Dragon Skin
Hair color: Blue
Race:Human
Class:Mage
Life: was raised by Lightning elves until he was twelve where he was captured by dwarves and sold as a slave to a rich dwarven family, he later stole some of the secrets of the dwarves magic from the rich dwarven family and ran away into teh woods, where he practiced there magic until he was 15, when he was 15 he found that a desprate group of human rebels living in the mountains who called themselves the "Vindforepi" would pay him to kill soldiers of the king (ropined)
Goal: To overthrow ropined along with the rebels and take over the kingdom of Maels(Human)

Naruto's Fight · 10-02-2007, 09:45 PM

Please tell me if thsi is good enough

Akira Avelon · 10-02-2007, 10:46 PM

Not yet. I see some god modding and you need to flesh it out a bit. If you like. Go ahead and read some of the other bios to get an idea of what I look for in a bio. The ones I suggest you to look at are by me, The Dude, Jamie, Shakan'Dar and My Final Heaven. They are well developed bios that should give you some ideas on what you could advance on. It's good for a start however, but as I said. It still needs work.

Naruto's Fight · 10-14-2007, 09:08 AM

Thank you for that advise

09-29-2007, 08:32 PM	#1 (permalink)
Naruto's Fight Member Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Destiny Islands Posts: 57 Rep Power: 3	Naruto's fight, characters. Name:Arinine brackendork (Elvish) Aripiooine rishindar (Dwarvern) Age:16 Race:Elf Height: 5'6 Eyes:Blue(Red when angry) Occupation:Gets payed by rebels to kill the king ropined's men (Ropined is a human king) Notable characteristics: Two dragon claw scrapes on his right cheek Magic:He has the power to Control, Fire,Ice,can Transform into a dragon the size of a Cheetah, and can summon the souls of dead dragons. Weaknesses:Thunder, Crystal(Weapons not the raw material) and can't take alot of beer before getting drunk, and is very weak physically Strengths:He can tame dragons and control them, he is a master of Elven and Dwarvern magic, and has a wide knowledge of maps. Personality: Basically he's angry all the time Weapons: Dragon Staff, Flame Staff, Elemental ring, and the jade of the ground. Armor: Golden Dragon Skin Hair color: Blue Race:Human Class:Mage Life: was raised by Lightning elves until he was twelve where he was captured by dwarves and sold as a slave to a rich dwarven family, he later stole some of the secrets of the dwarves magic from the rich dwarven family and ran away into teh woods, where he practiced there magic until he was 15, when he was 15 he found that a desprate group of human rebels living in the mountains who called themselves the "Vindforepi" would pay him to kill soldiers of the king (ropined) Goal: To overthrow ropined along with the rebels and take over the kingdom of Maels(Human) __________________ Dick Cheney will kill us all . Last edited by Naruto's Fight : 10-02-2007 at 10:01 PM. Reason: Needed more stuff

10-02-2007, 09:45 PM	#2 (permalink)
Naruto's Fight Member Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Destiny Islands Posts: 57 Rep Power: 3	Please tell me if thsi is good enough __________________ Dick Cheney will kill us all .

10-14-2007, 09:08 AM	#4 (permalink)
Naruto's Fight Member Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Destiny Islands Posts: 57 Rep Power: 3	Thank you for that advise __________________ Dick Cheney will kill us all .

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10-02-2007, 10:46 PM	#3 (permalink)
Akira Avelon Thy life for a dream Join Date: Feb 2007 Posts: 690 Rep Power: 5	Not yet. I see some god modding and you need to flesh it out a bit. If you like. Go ahead and read some of the other bios to get an idea of what I look for in a bio. The ones I suggest you to look at are by me, The Dude, Jamie, Shakan'Dar and My Final Heaven. They are well developed bios that should give you some ideas on what you could advance on. It's good for a start however, but as I said. It still needs work.